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This is science fiction written without the benefit of a good understanding of basic science. Or perhaps the author *does* have a good grasp of current science, but either cannot trust himself to communicate it effectively to a lay reader base, or simply cannot believe that his audience is capable of comprehending it? This 1st book was free for download, and I only barely managed to convince myself to read the whole book after the 1st several chapters because I'd already purchased the rest of the trilogy, anticipating I would like the novel based upon the Amazon description and an intriguing cover. Rarely has the old adage, "Don't judge a book by its cover" been more appropriate a warning, even though this 1st title was free.
I *did* read the 1st 4 books, 3 of them as Nook books. That earns them at least 2 stars from me, since I am reserving my 1 star reviews for titles I couldn't force myself to finish. Books 1 and 4 are the most poorly-executed of the 4. I simply don't understand all the wonderful 4 and 5 star reviews of works so light on science and so heavy on fiction and fantasy, and burdened with such large flaws of fact and voice. But I'll guess that the creative ideas behind the work and perhaps a poor understanding of basic scientific concepts allowed them to ignore things which stopped me cold, popping me right out of the story as efficiently as might my hearing Sister Mary Francis cover a gangsta rap track.
On the topic of free, I truly do appreciate authors like this one, having a large catalog of works making their early titles available for free so one may try them without risk. But in all honesty, a review is a review and it would defeat the purpose to allow the price to defeat the purpose of an honest review. So, plain and simple, thanks, but this author could have done far, far better. If he has a word processor and computer, or even access to a public library, he could very easily have fact-checked any of this science which he has so completely ignored. He isn't meeting the reader half-way to even barely-plausibility along the way to the reader's requirement to suspend his disbelief as he takes up the story.
If you remember a few of the most essential and basic science lessons from your early school days, e.g. the following laws: 1) the law of conservation of energy, 2) Newtonian Mechanics, 3) Boyle's Gas Laws, 4) the Second Law of Thermodynamics, 5) "Nature Abhors a Vacuum". 6) and basic economic theory, you will constantly be jarred out of this story and plot line by blatant disregard for basic physics and economic theory regarding critical points of the storyline. Granted, all readers are expected to meet the authors mid-way with a voluntary suspension of disbelief. But this author either simply doesn't understand what he's writing or asking, or he simply doesn't care to try to earn the right to list this title as science fiction instead of in the more proper pure fantasy category wherein this work and its subsequent titles belong.
For the author's benefit, I'll share that:
1) There is going to be a great deal of waste heat generated by the storage or the discharge of electrical energy, sufficient to vaporize his envisioned nanobots, should they even begin to attempt 0.001% of the feats he expects them to perform routinely as major plot points. Likewise, only in fantasy could a human body store or liberate such energies without generating immense and unmanageable/ unsurvivable heat.
2) A nano machine is not impervious to mechanical or thermal energies. So a microscopic layer, for example, couldn't prevent a papercut, much less a sword stroke, a bullet's impact, or an explosive shockwave overpressure event. They would be converted from nanomachines to either an aerosol dust of nanoparticles, or a cloud of silicon vapor, or both, coating the wounds they failed to prevent.
3.) Ordinary submarines, even modern ones, cannot operate at miles beneath the ocean. Each 32 feet of depth adds 14.7 psi (an atmosphere) of pressure. WW2 boats routinely had a crush depth under 1000 feet and even modern nuclear subs cannot survive more than a 1/2 mile deep. Experimental vehicles like the Woods Hole's 'Alvin' can reach and maintain 2 miles depth, for only several hours before being required to surface. But each 1,000 feet of depth adds another 30 atmospheres of pressure, so at 2 miles depth, there will be 300 atmospheres of pressure on all surfaces, over 3000 psi, enough to squeeze a liter of air into 3ml of space, and there could simply *never* be a vacuum-filled chamber having any outlet to the sea. And no passenger capsule using metallurgy prior to the 1960s could survive such depths.
Likewise, a 21st century American couldn't even *begin* to effectively communicate with an Englishman from circa 1000 AD, and certainly would not be able to converse using his habitual cliches, metaphors, mannerisms, etc. Since such time travel is a main plot feature, it is remarkable that all the characters in each era still speak with precisely the English of the modern era to our protagonist... a massive convenience for both he and the author, doubtless. But the convention truly hampers the character's dialog, often jarringly so when a person of an archaic age uses a modern phrase or euphemism.
And while we're speaking of dialog, ouch! Seriously, the 1st 5 chapters or so is filled with the most ridiculously over-the-top dialogue from the most ridiculous comic book styled cardboard cut-out villains, who act more hapless than Keystone Cops.
Blessedly, this tapers off somewhat as we moved into the story, which is what allowed me to finish the works, but, painfully, there is a tendency for this comic-book voice and author intrusion to pop up jarringly and repeatedly around major plot points. And then there's what I could never shake from the moment that I read the title. I mean each time I read the word 'Aliomenti', I couldn't help but to recognize that the fictional (Bavarian) 'Illuminati' also contains 5 syllables, many of the same or similar phonemes, and that it is difficult to imagine that the similarity was accidental.
And to top it all off, at some point, the narration begins to read like an accountant delivering a childrens' Sunday school lesson as if reading it from an antiquated telephone residential listings book. At some point, the character Will's internal dialog becomes indistinguishable from his spoken dialog, and even from the author's routine intrusions. It really makes it hard to remain 'inside' the story as you read it, able to experience the storyline through the character's eyes instead of having it narrated to you as if by Ferris Beuller's teachers droning on and on. I'd really like to have had the chartacters tell the story more often, using their own unique voices, rather than to have the author narrate it to me in his own voice, using the characters more like finger puppets than actors on a stage contained between two covers.
I can't honestly recommend this title to anyone, and so I won't. But it is free, and more entertaining that watching late night infomercials, if you've little else to do. And Books 2 and 3 earn 3 stars, albeit sharing many of the flaws already shared. So far, I'm out $3 and about 24 hours, and I can live with that, for now. And I believe this author deserves the chance to hone his craft using such donations.